2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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When I was a little boy, I dreamt nonthing. Maybe ,being a excellent person in study is my unequal persude .When I left home and go to study in a colledge ,400 kilometers away from my hometown huangshan (Huizhou ,her used name which sustained more than 800 hundreds) , I started realize I come from a great palce where created a glorious history in the ancient dynasty,a place where creatde hui merchants,hui culture,hui cuisine and so on. Now her name is huangshan,a famous tourist city because of Mount huang .But a sadly truth palced in front of the people of Huizhou is that compared with her history this area is lost in modern.