作者词汇基础很好,也能较灵活使用学术词汇,望继续努力;可适当增加从句的使用;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
When I was a little boy, I dreamt nothing. Maybe, being a happy boy is my unique pursue at that time. When I grow up and left home to go to study in a college, 400 kilometers away from my hometown Huizhou,I started to realize I loved my hometown so much.I was shocked and realized I should also make some contribution to my hometown in the future When I graduated, with my dream, I started my job, than I found that the dream is very plump, reality very bone. So I made a decision that go back to campus to have a further study.Now, I am here as a postgraduate at Donghua university. My dream of making my own little contribution to my hometown is always there, but I should make myself more excellent to achieve it. To be honest, I am so cherish this opportunity of studying here, so I made a detailed plan before I came here. The expectation to my study is also the demands to myself. Firstly, I should study well of my major courses, these are essential demands to myself since it is my chief duty as a student. Secondly, I will browse many books which are correlate to my major, I read these books because I think it is a way which let me be a qualified student of Economics, and it is also a good way to improve my knowledge. Thirdly, in order to finish my thesis easily, I need read academic papers in my major area. In terms of the expectations of my future career, I am not sure which specific area I will engage in. Now I am interested in several fields, for example, Financial sector, Consulting industry or to participate in the civil service exam. No matter which area I will finally work, I do believe I will do my best to do it, and to make some contribution to society. About the future, I have many words to say. Nobody doesn't want to be a successful man in his future, of course including me. But according to my understanding, a successful man does not mean he or she has a big company, or has a lot of money. In my opinion, a truly successful person is one who really does something useful for the world we live in, not just he or she have something. Put it in another way, a successful person is a man who is riched in social responsibility. To be a responsible man is what I want to be in the future. My dream is simple, do a useful person to society, particularly a man make some contribution to my hometown just as my ancestors did, no matter directly or indirectly. About expectation of myself is concrete but also very abstract. To put it simply, it can be my recent goals, it also can be my lofty ideals. But target or lofty ideal, I need it, it is a beacon in my life journey, it lights my road, it guides me forward.