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2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

发布时间:2014-06-09 15:38浏览次数:11355
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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in people's life and then explain the consequences of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

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拼写做的很棒,在平时练习中注意词汇量的积累;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。

用户练习作文:

Nowadays,mobile phone is more and more popular.Most of us have one or two even more.And it seems that we can not live without it.We take it with us whenever and wherever.We have to commit that it bring much more convenience in contacting our parents and friends. Every coin has two sides.Although it brings convenience to us,we may get into many troubles when we overuse it.Some people stare their cell phones when they are crossing the street.In such a case,we may hit others and may cause some conflicts.It was reported that there were some bus drivers who look their cell phones when they drove the bus in the high -speed way.The consequence is obvious. Mobile phones are the product of the advanced technology。We should make full best of it,but what should we do is to use it to help us not to harm us.

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