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新东方托福高分作文:你最想改变你家乡哪方面?

发布时间:2013-07-08 16:37浏览次数:885
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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

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No matter who we are,where we are,or what we do,all of us try to achieve success in our career.Success could bring people the money,status,wealth and brilliant future.However,someone finally accomplishes his goal while another fails. Why? And how could we take a short cut to success? In my opinion,I deem the way to succeed could be divided into four parts as follows.In the first place,a strong heart that could resist enormous pressure is necessary,just as the proverb goes,"Failure is the mother of success".Secondly,diligence plays a key role in the way to success.Besides,a good relationship with your friends or partners could make it much easier.They could try their efforts to help you when you are in trouble.Last but not least,maybe opportunity will also be a dominant element in your way to success. In a word,“Rome was not built in a day”.We must try our efforts to enrich our knowledge,widen the vision,Finally,all of us will find the right way to success.

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