2009年考研英语作文真题:网络的近与远

文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用；采用了一些简单的从句；一些学术词汇的使用比较灵活，但文中拼写错误较多。

what a vividly picther in discribing the addiction of people to the internet.it discribe people in front of the computer in a narrow space is communacating with each other and broaden their eyes.it seems to be self-evidence and cause us to thought-provocing. it holds apparently that the catton discribe a common problem with regard to internet.it conecting us with others far from every side of the word .it is the internet that makes the wold become a globle village. however some indeviduls are addicted in it so that they live in the virtule word .as a consequence,they reluctent to connected with others except in the virtule word as soon as after work ,even with their reletives . this phenominner must be solve for it is harmfull to our community .we we need to improve our communicating using the internet to develop some common hobby.and internet is important to us to make our dayly life better.