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As the development of the world,an increasing number of people are using internet.Because nowerdays the internet are so significant in our daily life.especially millions of young people hace made friends on line.So,there is a hot debate on whether it is good for not.But in my eyes, the advantages of making feiends on line outweigh the disadvantages. The reasons why I hold the view are as follows: Frist of all,everone are make a living in a completion society,it is a good way to lose pressure on internet.We can chat what we want,than we will feel much better,so that we have more energy to work.Besideas,by making a lot of differentn friends on the internet ,we can get more information and learn more knowedge from others which could broaden our view and gain more chances.At last,making friends are more efficent and convient which can save a lot of precious time. It is true that using oo much time or making friends without selection have some disadvantages; for example, it may cause people to ignore other aspects of danger. But overall this behavior is good and has its reality basis. Making friends on line is always needed in our modern world.
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