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一年级英语作文:A Busy Day

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:23浏览次数:2578
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小作者描绘了他繁忙的一天,帮妈妈做家务,做作业,打乒乓,看电视...多么充实的一天
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单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;文中句子偏简单,可增加从句使用量;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。

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What a busy day! It was Sunday yesterday. John got up early at morning and after he washed his face and brushed his teeth, John was asked to help his mother to prepare the breakfast. First he cleaned the table and waved the milk in microwave. After breakfast he washed the dishes and then did his homework. John played table tennis in the afternoon after all homework done. In the evening, he watched TV ... How busy a day it was!

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