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With the development of the world,an increasing number of people are using internet.Because nowadays the internet are so significant in our daily life.especially millions of young people have made friends on line.So,there is a hot debate on whether it is good for not.But in my eyes, the advantages of making friends on line outweigh the disadvantages. The reasons why I hold the view are as follows: Frist of all,everone are make a living in a completion society,it is a good way to lose pressure on the internet.We can chat what we want,than we will feel much better,so that we have more energy to work.Besideas,by making a lot of different friends on line ,we can get more information and learn more knowledge from others which could broaden our view and gain more chances.At last,making friends are more efficent and convienient which can save a lot of precious time. It is true that using oo much time or making the wrong friends have some disadvantages; for example, it may meet some bad people and cause people to ignore other aspects of danger. But overall this behavior is good and is always needed in our modern world.
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