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Limiting the Use of Disposal Bags In hundreds years ago, disposal bag was invented by a man. People suppose that it is the most great invention in this century and using in wild-world. May be people though it is very convenient and cheap. But now, we are in trouble. This kind of disposal bags hard to resolve, some people want to firing or cover, but it would make air pollution or hardening of the soil. Then this problem not easy to solve until nowadays white pollution at everywhere. Follow the problem, limiting the use of disposal bags could't wait.We could relieve our air pollution and soil pollution if we limit the use of disposal bags, then we create a beautiful world!