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I live in Hangzhou, a beautiful twon. If my foreign friend will visit my hometwon.I will take him/he to Xihu. Beacuse xihu is a famaus travel place, there have beautiful lake, purly air and there have kinds of delicies food near the Xihu. Bellow are the reason why I take my foreign friend to Xihu.