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小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:36浏览次数:36980
要求:
用英文描述下自己的好朋友。
用户的作文(系统评分55.5分
评语:

采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;可适当增加长句和复杂句的使用;作者词汇表达不够多样,希望能多使用学术词汇;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。

用户练习作文:

Last sunday, Mr.Lee got up very early to go fishing. He spent the whole day sitting beside the river but got nothing at the end of the day. Therefore, Mr.Lee was very dissapointed due to that he had to go home by dinner time. On his way home, Lee thought that his wife might be mad at him for bringing nothing back. So he bought a big fish at the market before he got home. At least, he was happy finally for what he could bring home.

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