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Last sunday, Mr.Lee got up very early to go fishing. He spent the whole day sitting beside the river but got nothing at the end of the day. Therefore, Mr.Lee was very dissapointed due to that he had to go home by dinner time. On his way home, Lee thought that his wife might be mad at him for bringing nothing back. So he bought a big fish at the market before he got home. At least, he was happy finally for what he could bring home.