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字数:300 满分:100分
作者词汇基本功很好,在学术词汇方面希望能更熟练的使用文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Beauty is seen Beauty is seen is my favorite poem written by E-Yeh-Shure. ‘Beauty is seen. In the sunlight, the trees, the birds. Corn growing and people working. Or dancing for their harvest…’ What a beautiful poem is! It inspired me to discover what the beauty in our life is. Definitely, beauty can be seen not only with your eyes but also with your mind. Do you remember a time when you just hang out at filed with friends and turned home with your dirty shirt? Do you remember a time when you broken something and make an apology to your mom? Do you remember a time when you cried all day because of the illness of your pet? These are beautiful moment in my eyes. In fact, there is purity, honest, sympathy. There is beauty. Purity is an abstract concept and is hard to describe. As far as I can tell, children who wear on naïve smile seem never tired of playing or running everywhere. Parents who love their children unconditionally often tolerate our massive mistake. Nurses who are called angle take care of patient patience. Children’s world is always simple and pure. Sometimes I very admire them as I grow up with so many pressures. Parent’s love and nurses’ devotion are purity, because they bring love to us and teach us how to love. Our world is becoming more complex, but purity is not fading away. Honesty means that you should open your heart and true to others. A simple motto say, ‘Life is like a field of newly fallen snow, where I chose to walk every step will show.’ SanLu company fell into disrepute because they sale fake and poor quality milk powder. They fooled customers into buying their products in order to make profit. Finally, it fell apart and punished by the law. In general, a successful company lives up to their reputation, on the ground that he is honest to customers. Honesty is a powerful component of beauty and is the basis for enriching your relationship with others. It is ugly that people lack of inner value and sincere mind. Sympathy is another indispensible quality to make our life beautiful. As we see, many people died and became homeless in some natural disasters; such as, earthquake, tsunami, volcanic eruption, etc. At that moment, people slicked together and denoted some money and food to people in need. They show sympathy and lend a hand to them. More and more children in remote area can go to school and poor people can see a doctor for the reason that people raised money for them and established many charity organizations. I cannot imagine how cold world is without sympathy. We also like people kind to us but indifferent when we in low spirit. Sympathy is an inner secret of beauty. The fact is that no matter how nicely we dress, how beautiful we decorate our house, how lovely our dinner parties are, we can’t be truly beauty without beautiful heart. Beautiful is seen in our life, in a simple “thank you”, in a sincere apology, in an unexpected moment. We shouldn’t judge a people just by their appearance instead of by their manners. Beauty means you do what you do because it is right and not just fashionable or profitable.