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To: Mary Chen date: Dec, 23, 2008 Hi Mary, I'm sorry that I can't discuss company Chinese New Year's party with you guys as I will have to take a one-week business trip in Shanghai tomorrow. So, can you do me a favor? Please inform me of the final decision that about the time, the date, the site and anything I need to prepare. I will be grateful for that! Thank you so much! Best regards, Li Ming