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Internet is one of the most important invention of 21st century.A lot of instant communication softwares are developed to shorten the distance between people.So many people deem the internet has a positive impact on interpersonal relationships.People could have a communication with others all around the world. However,just as a proverb goes,"Every coin has two sides",the others have the opposite opinion..With the quickening pace of modern life and the fierce competition of society,people in expanding numbers fell a sense of indifference,caused by a lack of communication and social interaction.Lots of teenagers are addicted to internet games and seldomly communicate with their parents or neighborhoods.And the majority of people only see a film with the internet instead of interaction in holiday. In my opinion,I deem the internet is a double-edged sword.If someone have a great aim and ideal,the internet will have a contribution to his interperson.However,If someone couldn't set up a right goal,maybe the internet will have a negative effect on it.
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