2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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hi,welcome to Yunan, I am a yunnan gril,so today i will introduce yunan to you.yunnan is a beautiful place, there are snow mountain in dali and lijiang , but also ancient city is famous in world . yunan is a big travel market to china ,everyear many people form varity place in order to avoid furious sun to come kungming,yunnan is a magic provience in china , because it is provide a plenty of flower and tradittional chinese medicine .it like a big plant market iusse in named plant kingdom and animal kingdom. whats more there are spcially culture different other place ,such as 26 ethnic minorities.they are use particular langauage and life style.