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the impart of the internet on interpersonal communication From the picture,we could made a conclusion that with the developmet of technology,virtual social tools become popular.Even between the inmitate family,they have to accept and adapt to the changes comes from the technology.In terms of me ,we should balance the relation between virtual worlds and real world.Ample examples can be cited to demonstrate my point of view. First,there is no doubt that the progress of technology make a difference to us and bring us more convenience and freshness .but it reduces the chances of people talking face to face,to which may eliminate the intimate relationship.just like the picture reveals.what's more,it's significant for everybody to be companied in the real world so that the interpersonal communication is dispensable.As we all know,the impart of the international communication has its adventage and disadventage.I firmly convince that as long as we keep balance,the internet will play a crucial role in the personal communication. In a word,every coin has two sides.the impart of the internet on interpersonal communication is profound but we should maintain the traditional ways of communication.Talking face to face is good to build up intimate friendship.
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