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How to improve school safety? During the last four years, there were some accidents in the school in China. This time, everybady thought that we'll have to improve our school safety. But, How to improve school safety? Now, I tell you some advises. At first, add some securitys into the school. And the security must be trained. The content is about campus security. And How to protect students? At last, all students must be trained about campus safety. They must be know that save themselves and protect themselves.