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Nowadays, online shopping more and more popular.Due to a lot of people in online shopping, online shopping create many problems.Online shopping has many advantages.We can buy the same things online is more cheaper.Online shopping spend less time than the reality, we don't need to choose goods in the shop, you just need us to use the computer.Because online shopping cheap and convenient, he became a lot of people a good choice.But online shopping also has a lot of unexpected problems.Many people will find that the things they buy is don't need in life.There are a lot of people find the things they buy back and pictures on the computer is far!First of all, in my opinion, you should think before you buy what you buy is what you need?Then you should negotiate with the shopkeeper good, so that you can better understand what do you want to buy the goods.Finally, if you feel you have been deceived, you should call the police right away!