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There is a old saying goes :"It is not wise to come to a conclusion right now just see something."We should think before we do everything. Nowadays there is a common phenomenon that lots of people come to a conclusion just depending some news he heard.For example,someonetold Xiao Ming that his best friend Li was the thief who stole the money.Xiao Ming depended to break up with Li at once.At last,Xiao Ming knew that in fact Li was not the thief.But it was too late,he lost his best friend.
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