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As we all know, China's Got Talent is a stage where everyone have a chance to show themselves to people around the world. It provides a chance for ordinary being to make their dreams of stardom come true. People of all ages and of different place with their own special purpose come to the stage show themselves. If I have a chance to participate in a talent show, I would make thorough preparations to show myself to all the audience by all means.