作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;作者词汇使用较为丰富熟练,单词拼写方面要更仔细;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Now,for many students,mental health is as important as physical health.students feel mush pressure of studying and home,but most perents don not know it clearly. it causes much pressure accomplished in their mind. how to make this question out is patents concern.much time for students is spent in school,so school behaviors make great impact on students.less homeword and full ralaxed time are very important.in this way,students will have enough time to do what they want and expect.in the other hand,studetns need more carefulless and talk to adult. but it is not enough,students selves must learn to improve by thenselves.Don not think too much about something useless,pay more attention on other things.it is better focus on one thing you really interested.
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