句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;作者词汇表达较丰富,但请仔细检查词汇的拼写;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Now,for many students,mental health is as important as physical health.Students feel mush pressure of studying and home,but most parents don't know it clearly.It causes much pressure accumulating in their mind. How to make this question out is patents concern.Much time for students is spent in school,so school behaviors make great impact on students.Less homeword and full ralaxed time are very important.In this way,students will have enough time to do what they want and expect.In the other hand,studetns need more carefulless and talk to adult. but it is not enough,students selves must learn to improve by thenselves.Don not think too much about something useless,pay more attention on other things.It is better focus on one thing you really interested.
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