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as the old saying, don't put you eggs into just one basket. but one coin has two sides. both of them have disadvantage and advantage. in my opinion, i hold a view that don't put all in a basket. on the one hand ,if you put your eggs into one basket, you will face more risk.such as you use your all money to buy golden, you thought golden's price will up, while, it's down quickly.at this time, what can you do? so put into one basket is wrong. on the other hand, you could get more thing, because you have another money to use. use for learning, travel, and so on. but if you just use to these, you also lose something.