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It seems that the smile have a special magic.When we get in trouble,Maybe a smile can encourage us to go out of troubles. I still remember the last term,I did badly in English and I failed in the exam.I felt deep depression.At this time,My English teacher said to me"Nobaby will be successful without working hard,Nothing is difficult if you put your heart into it."There was a smile on her face just like the sun in the winter,That made me feel very warm.Thanks to her,I get good grade in another exam. Let us face life with the smile