2013-2014年高考英语卷写作表达题目范文汇总(31):助人为乐

过渡词很丰富，衔接词同时使用的恰到好处；作者在句法层面做的很棒；请增加词汇量的积累，并仔细检查词汇的拼写；请注意分段；可以适当增加副词的使用。

As I had had a long walk trough the whoelsale flower market, I stopped to enjoy big beatuiful roses. I noticed a shop where had kinds of cactuses at the other side of the place, so I went to have a look. As soon as the shop assistant saw me, he talked lots of knowleage about the cactuses to me. Then he took one of the cactus in front of me and asked wherther I like it, I had a glimpes of the cactus, it seemed that it was the smallest in these cactus, I did not like it. The assistant, however, gave it to me and told me that it have to be take care of by someone.