2013-2014年高考英语卷写作表达题目范文汇总(31):助人为乐

过渡词很丰富，衔接词同时使用的恰到好处；可适当增加从句的使用；文中词汇表达多样性不足，在学术词汇方面尤其要多积累；请注意分段；可以适当增加副词的使用。

As I had had a long walk trough the wholesale flower market, I stopped to enjoy big beautiful roses. I noticed a shop where had kinds of cacti at the other side of the place, so I went to have a look. As soon as the shop assistant saw me, he talked lots of knowledge about the cacti to me. Then he took one of the cacti in front of me and asked whether I like it, I had a glimpse of the cactus, it seemed that it was the smallest in these cactus, I did not like it. The assistant, however, gave it to me and told me that it has to be take care of by someone.