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可适当增加从句和复杂句使用；作者在学术词汇方面还有很大的空间，还要注意单词拼写；上下文衔接不流畅，文章结构不严谨。
The oil light which stands for the love of human is glowing in the dark night, but the oil light seems very happy as it could bring bright . the topic of picture reveals that the love resembling a light , appears more bright in the dark. It enlighten us all with a simple cartoon. the love plays a prominent role when people is in the bleak condition . the best example blows in my mind is the earthquake occuring in Wenchuan of Sichuang province ,in 2008. It was the most degree manittude that I have ever heared, which rendered thousands of people losing their home and families. And the catastrophe also caused the phisical as well as mental problem. fortunetly, there are many charitable organizations and volunteers delicating to helpe them restore their home, to give them health care. it was the love that help them evades the horrible story and rebuild the confidence to live. as a youngster, we should carry a substantial weight for the love, because to show the love is not merely the one's virtue reflecting but also the resiponsibility we should shouder. therefore, we should grasp the seriousness of love and convey love by doing everthing thing. the small thing can alter the world becaming shinning.
