3.give your point of view
大体意思:
网络的近与远 一/客观描述图:很多人在上网 二/说明意思:网络的普及是拉近了人们的距离还是使人们越来越疏远?
学术词汇需要继续积累,单词拼写不错;作者有一定功底,可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
As is vividly shown in the picture, we can see clearly that there are many people stay in one house. In the reality life the distence is very nearly, but the ecology distence is more far than daily life. The picture is very simple, but we can lean lots of thing from this photo. Modern society is becoming faster and faster, The Internet is increasing significant in our life and works. On the one hand, we often bay many things we need on The Internet. Shoping-online not only save time but also prove for us more choose. Also, we can found much information from The Internet. It can help us acknowledge a lot of things about all over the world. We can look though any news in any country and we can enjoy the movies, listen to the music and so on. The Internet makes us stay at home all day as well as not feel lonely. But on the other hand, we have to face some problems, The first important is due to we always abandon ourselves to play the computer, this leads to us can not communicate with our old friends and not enough time to take care of the children. The second important is if we cost so long time on The Internet, It will be not good health for us. In my view, we should usage The Internet try to reasonable, and we can not the computer disturb our daily life. If we want to relax, we can visit any classmate, or we can visit the museum also. All in all, when we leave off surfing onThe Internet, we will find that our life is very beautiful.