2004年考研英语作文真题:终点又是起点

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A "football" game As the cartoon vividly depicts,an old father,pitifully and helplessly,huddles up in the centre of the football field sorrounded by his own children.However,as goalkeeper,all of the children,ranging from the elder son to the younger daughter,stick to prevent from the obligation of support parents.What a chilling phenomenon! With the economic boom brings not only the material comfort,but the moral decline as well.In Chinese costome,it is a natural rule that raise your vulnerable parents after their dedication for your growth.Nevertheless,the courtesy derived from 5,000 years has vanished.On the one hand,instead of taking care of parents,offspring dedicated to their own life,such as new family,later generation and enterprise.Furthermore,it is common that junior are reluntant to offer an courtesy seat to the old.Anyway,it reflected the harshness of daily life:if you don't take your parents in and take care of them,nobody else who would. When the question comes to the duty of taking care of old parents,undountedly,i would appeal to the adult children:promise your parents an warm and happy old-year when they are approching their end.Not for the sake of their happiness,but yours.Remember,you may in the same situation one day.No matter take moral into account or for your own future,it is of essense that look after your parents.A person who cares their parents deserves care from their youngster.