字数:200满分:100分
使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;作者能较好的使用一些学术词汇,同时要避免个别拼写错误;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
A "football" game As the cartoon vividly depicts,an old father,pitifully and helplessly,huddles up in the centre of the football field surrounded by his own children.However,as goalkeeper,all of the youngster,ranging from the elder son to the younger daughter,stick to prevent from the duty of support parents.It reveals to us that the awareness of provide for parents is dropping. With the economic boom brings not only the material comfort,but the moral decline as well.In Chinese costome,it is a natural rule that raise your vulnerable parents after their dedication for your growth.Nevertheless,the courtesy derived from 5,000 years has vanished.On the one hand,instead of taking care of parents,offspring dedicated to their own life,such as new family,later generation and enterprise.Furthermore,it is common that junior are reluntant to offer an courtesy seat to the old.Anyway,it reflected the harshness of daily life:if you don't take your parents in and take care of them,nobody else who would. When the question comes to the duty of taking care of old parents,undountedly,i would appeal to the adult children:promise your parents an warm and happy old-year when they are approching their end.Not for the sake of their happiness,but yours.Remember,you may in the same situation one day.No matter take moral into account or for your own future,it is of essense that look after your parents.A person who cares their parents deserves care from their youngster.