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My new teacher Last year,we had a good teacher who we called Miss Guo.She was a student ,too.We liked her very much . But now ,she have to leave us because she is too busy.And one of her classmates takes part of her.The new teacher is very strict,she often leaves us much homework and exams .We don’t like it . We feel so disappointed .How nice it will be that Miss Guo comes back.