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Some people would give some suggestions for others. Sometime it would neither be good or be worst. For me, it s wrong choice to work without education. For someone told me that it s waste time to go to college. Since then, I have always thinked several times and asked for someone help before making a big decision. However, everything has both of the sides, it s good to make a decision quickly. In my opion, I think the important thing to make a choice is following your heart, and you have to paper everything before you do it, no matter how it s improtant.
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