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Some people would give some suggestions for others. Sometime it would neither be good or be worst. For me, it s wrong choice to work when I was 16 without studying. For someone told me that it s waste time to go to college. Since then, I have always thought several times and asked for someone help before making a big decision. However, everything has both of the sides, sometimes it s good to make a decision quickly. In my opinion, the most important thing is to make a choice to follow your heart, and you have to paper everything before you do it, no matter how it s important.
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