新东方托福高分作文:为什么要上大学？

文章结构清晰，有效地采用了多种衔接方法；句式灵活多变，但文中句子错误偏多了；文中用词稍显贫乏，有一些单词拼写错误；可以适当增加副词的使用。

In resently,more and more students and parents think attend college is not benefit for ourselves,but i don't think same to other. As development for society,many younger don't like study ,so leave the school come society begin to work ,they think the work better than school ,because they think the school can't study more things . But in my mind ,attend the college is very important ,because in the school you can know more and more the other information and know many knowledge .in the school ,if you have many knowledge you can achieve good career,and many new experiences.