- 分享到:
可将文中的简单句转换为长句或者复杂句；文中用词稍显贫乏，在词汇拼写也要再接再厉；上下文衔接欠佳，文章层次欠清晰，建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开；请注意分段；连词使用偏少。
From: wanghaiyang@hotmail.com Date: December 23rd, 2008 To：sales-dpartment@homail.com Subject:Check the product list Dear Mr.Johnson, We have recieved your 3,000 product on December 22nd, but according to our signing of No.35 order, we ought to have recieved3,500 product and we want to know about the left of 500 prodct. Please check your product list and respond as soon as possible. We are looking forward to your early reply!Thanks! Yours, Wang Haiyang
