2011年12月英语六级作文真题:成功之路

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The Way Success There is a saying goes,no pains,no gains.Following this,we can draw a conclusion that success is based on trying.And there is an old saying goes,attempt may be successful,but if you don't attempt that you can't get achievement.The following is my way that we can get success. First,the way of success is diligence.For example,Helen Keller,is a diligence person,who is blind but doesn't give up striving.Her diligence made her gain huge success.Second,target,all successful people have a target.They struggle for the aim all the time.It made them lead to the path of success.Last but not least,responsibility,they can take responsibility for themselves and their cause.It is necessary to be successful. To conclude,if we can do all these ,we will make our life enjoyable.That is to say,we have to struggle for success.The result will can add color to the dull routine of every day life. Something will make our life more enjoyable. For the majority of people,reading or learning a new skill has become the focus of their lives and the source of their happiness and contentment. Something,by occupying spare time so constructively,makes a person contented,with no time for boredom. What's more,living in school can save them a great deal of time on the way between home and school everyday,so they would be able to concentrate more time and energy on their academic work.