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雅思TASK1小作文模拟题:环境 Environment

发布时间:2013-07-10 16:40浏览次数:1215[网页划词已开启]
要求:

The graph contains information about the population of birds in Europe over a period of twenty four years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;请注意分段;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。

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The graph show a decreasment about the population of birds in Europe, for the years 1977 to 2001. From 1977 to 1980 three year's intervals the numbers of the birds is up to 125millions which is the highest point in the graph. but it went down quickly over the next 6 years to nearly 98 million in 1986.it then rose significantly to about 112 million in 1989. it fell sharply again over the next three years to about 95 million in 1992 and keep stable after that at between 96 to 90 million birds.The graph shows a tend of decline in the number of birds since 1995.

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