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Think Carefully There are so many people around our corner and what they do and talk may have influences to us.If we make concequence immediately when we saw or heard something from others,that will be unwise. Remember we are the leading roles in our life,we should not always look after others.Before we want to do something,it will be benefit to think carefully.Do you still remember there were a time when a lot of peopel went to shops to buy many salts just because the rumor 'there will be no salt soon'?That is really ridiculous but also alarms us whenerver we make end or plant to something,think more will never wrong.
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