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雅思写作范文:手机与因特网

发布时间:2013-05-15 12:10浏览次数:1002
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雅思写作主题:手机与因特网,字数在300字以内。
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文章学术词汇表达灵活,但拼写错误稍多;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;上下文衔接稍显不流畅。

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Nowadays, an increasing number of person are using high-tech products,including cell phone and Internet. In their opinion, these things bring more convience.But others have an opposive attitude.This trend have been an universial conversation.Although people are divided on this issue, both views seem to make sence.Personally, I agree with the opinion of users. Initially, it is no denying that cell phone and Internet have been involuted our traditional conmunications.Today,people can free and efficiently contact with others no matter where they are instead of writting letters which would take several days or even longer.What is more, we can sent variety of information styles,such as video and audio documents,which promote delight.In addition, these products are changing the common management style. For intance,teleconferencings and telecommutings mushroomed recently years. Employees can work and participate conferences at home,which not only save expenditure but also complete human-based management.Especially,for women,they may take care their babies when they at work.Finally, cell phone and Internet could symbol their social status and character of keeping pace with the times. However, this phenomenon also bring a Bandwagon Effect.People are keen on persuiting the newest products which contribute unnecessary waste.But, this situation is not associate with products themselves. In sum, high-tech products are benefiting our lives.We should hold an elightment attitude to new things and receive the changing from innovation.Only in this way can our society develop.

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