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很好的运用了从句，但部分句子稍有瑕疵；文章结构不错，使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词；作者词汇表达较丰富，学术词汇需继续加强，拼写检查要重视；请注意分段。
With the booming of economy and the development of people's living standard,an increasingly number of people have realized their lifes are not just existing for making money,supporting their family and doing the same things all day until they get sick of them.The whole world are combined together by the Internet,Imfornation,and people's footprints.More and More cultural movements have deep effects on most of us,which reminds us of what we live for,why we live in the world and what we can do to make our life more meaningful.As for me,all I want to do in my golden age is to travel around the world and I bet a lot of people like me want to do the same thing especially the teenagers.We don want to just stay at one place like an elder guys who can't walk anymore.We are powerful and full of energetic and curious about what we've never ever seen before.I have read a lot of books concering with others' journeys,which makes me like traveling.Those authors have their work their families but they still can live happliy because they do what they like to make their life more meaningful.Perhaps they are not that rich enough,but their spiritual legacy will last forever and their life is comprised of every beautifully meaningful things.
