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Nowadays most of the people who live in the big city have became been more and more interestied in shopping online. As my opionin, the davange of shopping online is very environment, that is useful for the people who do not have free time shopping. And you can shoice a some product from different shop. On other hand, you can buy some unusual stuff which is you never see it. that is amzing. Some people are willing to shop online because they find most of the stuff is cheaper than shop. But one of friends of mine have told me that you could not tell the different betwteen real stuff and fake corn. And it is hard to return back to the stop if you do not like the stuff from it. To sum up, I perfer shopping online and you have some exprience to buy. I am sure you would have a nice shopping.
