2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

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my views on online shopping nowdays , more and more people go shopping on online ,which is popular with the daily life .as well know ,the pepole go shopping on online ,that have many advantages.however ,it have many disadvantages. it is report that the online go shopping become more and more safey and quieted.but ,it maybe take some problem.example:shopping is a bad ,and the money is unsafey.so ,in my opinion ,firstly . going shopping on online before ,you must look the shop on online that is bad or good,secondly ,attention the cried card , it is generally that ,go shopping on online is very good ,if you attention yourself fianance .