单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
Today, here comes a new teacher. she is a beautiful girl and looks like my sister very much. She teaches us English. She has long black hair and two big black eyes. Her voice is better. She always tells us a stroy before the class. And, all of us like her very much.