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2013-2014年高考英语卷写作表达题目范文汇总(31):助人为乐

发布时间:2014-09-30 15:30浏览次数:1030
要求:
请用英语写一篇100个词左右的短文,记述一件发生在你身上(边)的助人为乐的事迹。要求如下:

1. 描述事情经过;  

2. 谈谈你的感想。

用户的作文(系统评分63.0分
评语:

希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;作者在句法层面做的很棒;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。

用户练习作文:

Mother is praised by people around the world, indeed, mother is so great, she gives birth to us, teaching us how to face the world and takes care of us all the time. If you ask me who is the most beautiful person in the world, there is no doubt that my mother is the most beautiful person in my eye. I love her so much, no one can take place of her. If you are asked who you think is the most beautiful person in the world, I will say that my mother is the most beautiful person in the world, she means so much to me. She is the person who takes care of me all the time, when I feel unhappy, she is the first one realizes it and comfort me. My mother is a homely woman, but she is kind-hearted, I love her so much. Everyone comes the world with a mother, it is mother who gives birth to us and then raises us with her patience and caring. There is a Mothers’ Day every year, it is to remind people of their honor to their mothers. There is no doubt that mother is the most beautiful person in the world. We should visit our mother often, though we are busy, company them and talk to them.

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