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June 3, Friday Fine On my way home on the bus, I saw that an old man with backbag and violin and a boy around ten years old got on the bus. when i standed up and asked the old man to sit, the boy sat down directly. the old man standed beside him. the boy asked loudly water for drinking.I can't help with his behavior when i saw he throw the empty bottle in the bus. I told him that he should respect old man and do something by himself. keeping the public environment clean is the basic behavior as a student. All of people in the bus saw the boy, he dropped his head shamed.
