作者词汇表达较多样灵活,也能较准确地使用学术词汇;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;适当增加一些从句的使用,会为文章添彩。
I assume that you are familiar with the words “it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket". Definitely, putting all eggs in one basket, it not only maybe lose all the things you have in one's mistake,but also will have high risk.It is obvious that it is unwise to lay all eggs in one basket. Simple as ancient’s remark may sound, it contains abundant philosophy of life and informs us of the significance of route of retreat. It plays an indispensable role in our life . Making yourself have another way to choose will enable us to achieve our objectives more smoothly and realize our dreams more rapidly. The more changes you can choose, the less you will lose. Quite a few examples can be given to prove the importance of it, however, I can think of no better illustration than the following one: how could Buffett do investment, if he failed to do sth. From my perspective, at no time should we ignore the importance of diversification . Accordingly,we should set all eggs in different basket and always bear in mind that spreading risk can make us get more.“It is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.” A famous philosopher also once said.