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In my mind,the most interesting place in China is Chengdu,the capital of Sichuan province.It is also my hometown.I love there deeply.Let me show you how lovely there is.There is much delicious food in Chengdu,such as hotpot,jiaozi of Zhongs',mapo tofu and so on.You can enjoy these food happy.Chengdu not only have many delicious foods,but also there are many place you will having fun,for example the Technology Museum of Chengdu,Tianfu Square,Chunxi Road.By the way,I think that the Chunxi Road is the most interesting place in Chengdu in girls mind,because there are many stores sale things of fashion.Besides fashion,there are many beautiful sense made by nature in Chengdu,for instant Emei Mountains,Qingcheng Mountains.I believe that you would love there if come soon.