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As we know,it's unwise to make a conclusion instantly when we see something or hear something.In daily life,before we make a conclusion we should consider all aspects that we see or hear.If we make a conclusion rashly we should accept the consequences of doing this thing. Firstly,it's is believe that everyone sees the ads on TV shows or internet,but some ads seemingly have bad effects on people,in fact it's teach us from another angle.So we can't make a conclusion careless.Secondly,it's always happen in our everyday life that two best friends can become indifferent to each other because of one of them hear some bad something about himself from others,when he hears this he immediately make a conclusion that his friend betray him.In fact, his friend didn't do this.As we know, because he make a conclusion rashly, this friendship is broken.As last but nor least,some people around us do some things seemingly do harm for us, but from another angle we feel by heart we can realize that we make a conclusion rashly is wrong. As far as I am concerned,we should think carefully before we make a conclusion,no matter what we see or hear, we should always remember everything has two sides as we know every coin has two sides.We should consider all aspects about one thing.
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