作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
in our long life, we can meet different people and establish various friendship. my best friend is lily, a sweet girl with black long hair and big smile. we met in the central park two years ago and from then on, we have become good friends. we both like drawing, especially draw something in nature, the birds, the trees and the rivers, everything beautiful below the sky. she is fond in music as well, wearing earphones and listening to different music everyday. i like lily, and she likes me.