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Some teenagers spend a lot of time playing computer games and this can cause both social and health problems for them. What are some of the problems caused by playing computer games?
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computer use may cause many problems ,such as teenager crime and quarrels or even burglaries .teenagers spend a lot of time playing computer games and they do not have enoungh time spend on their homework and even their own curriculums.It may cause their grade were not very good and must led to quarrels with their parents .When their parents banned them play computer games in their home and they may play games in internet bar but when they counld not afford the money they would not ask for their parents so they resort to stealing when they do not have enoungh money to affort their fees of playing computer games or they adopt to burglaries. When some teenagers addicated themselves in DOTA or LOL, they may act as what they plays and it is what we called teenager crime .When many people buined themselves in computer games ,they must abundant their study and greates further.Our country do not have enoungh skilled person to buit and our country development become slow even back .
